issue 11--People's behavior is largely determined by forces not of their own
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[align="left"]11. People's behavior is largely determined by forces not of their own making.[/align][align="left"]Outline: partial agree, [/align][align="left"]正：1.建立相对自由而不伤害他人的社会，impossible绝对自由，保障well-being of the society[/align][align="left"]2.父母送小孩去优秀的学校[/align][align="left"]反：1.purpose of education, independent thinker,轻易受影响是不成熟表现[/align]
[align="left"]正文[/align][align="left"]1)The speaker claims that it is the exterior forces rather than the interior one that largely determine people's behavior, but is the statement generally correct? It seems difficult to find out which factor have more impact on the conducts of the people, since the cases at different time and different places are quite various. I concede that to some extent, people's behavior are subjected to the environment around them. However, when people grow to maturity and develop a independent ability to handle problems in their own ways, people are inclined to base their behavior on their interior factors, which is also regarded as the purpose of education.[/align][align="left"]
[/align][align="left"]2)Admittedly, the society and legislation have established certain rules which people should obey, in order to regulate and protect the society from being in chaos. It is the assurance of the relativity of freedom of every specific individual in the society that leads to the consents among people not to infringe the basic rights of each other. Otherwise, the unlimited freedom of human are definitely detrimental both to the stability, security and welfare of the whole society. For instance, a man greedy for money cannot just steal it from the bank or other people, which is obviously illegal. It is these legal constraints that preserve the security of people's life, which should naturally forbid the unlimited and irrational behaviors of some people. Besides the legal constraints, people in society are also submissive to other physical restrictions or limitation of abilities, such as the financial limitation of a person obstructs his ability to become a philanthrope.[/align][align="left"]
[/align][align="left"]3)Another conspicuous evidence for the determinant effect of exterior environment is the susceptibility of children. One can just see how prevalent the facts that parents intend to send their children to study in the best school in their hometown. In the ancient China, Menci's mother moved their home for triple times, and at last settled their house near a school, which provided the best atmosphere for Menci to study, who eventually became a great philosopher in China. Due to the naivete and immaturity of children, the outside events can have a major influence on the behavior of them. Thus many parents do their best to create the propitious environment for their child.[/align][align="left"]
[/align][align="left"]4)However, as children grow up to adults, it is entirely possible that the interior factors replace the exterior ones, exerting the main effects on people's behaviors. Being independent, analytical as well as insusceptible to various temptations, all of these abilities contribute to one's perseverance in pursuing his personal goal of life. Moreover, the purpose of education is not just instilling students with knowledge, but to develop other vital abilities of students, such as thinking analytically, putting forward question and solving it independently, self-teaching, etc. Therefore, it is convincing to say that every educated person should have the capacity of sticking to his own desire of success, as well as unaffecting by exterior impacts.[/align][align="left"]
[/align][align="left"]5)In conclusion, although many rules set up by legislation do regulate and restrict the certain behaviors of humans, it is the interior factors, to a larger extent, that have great impact on every educated person, who is insusceptible to temptations, analytical to difficult problems, and perseverant to achieve one's own destination.[/align][align="left"]
[/align][align="left"]words:533[/align][align="left"]麻烦批改者给点建议，句式上或词汇上的，谢谢。[/align][align="left"]需要回批的留下地址。[/align]
[align="left"]正文[/align][align="left"]1)The speaker claims that it is the exterior forces rather than the interior one that largely determine people's behavior, but is the statement generally correct? It seems difficult to find out which factor have more impact on the conducts of the people, since the cases at different time and different places are quite various. I concede that to some extent, people's behavior are subjected to the environment around them. However, when people grow to maturity and develop a independent ability to handle problems in their own ways, people are inclined to base their behavior on their interior factors, which is also regarded as the purpose of education.[/align][align="left"]
[/align][align="left"]2)Admittedly, the society and legislation have established certain rules which people should obey, in order to regulate and protect the society from being in chaos. It is the assurance of the relativity of freedom of every specific individual in the society that leads to the consents among people not to infringe the basic rights of each other. Otherwise, the unlimited freedom of human are definitely detrimental both to the stability, security and welfare of the whole society. For instance, a man greedy for money cannot just steal it from the bank or other people, which is obviously illegal. It is these legal constraints that preserve the security of people's life, which should naturally forbid the unlimited and irrational behaviors of some people. Besides the legal constraints, people in society are also submissive to other physical restrictions or limitation of abilities, such as the financial limitation of a person obstructs his ability to become a philanthrope.[/align][align="left"]
[/align][align="left"]3)Another conspicuous evidence for the determinant effect of exterior environment is the susceptibility of children. One can just see how prevalent the facts that parents intend to send their children to study in the best school in their hometown. In the ancient China, Menci's mother moved their home for triple times, and at last settled their house near a school, which provided the best atmosphere for Menci to study, who eventually became a great philosopher in China. Due to the naivete and immaturity of children, the outside events can have a major influence on the behavior of them. Thus many parents do their best to create the propitious environment for their child.[/align][align="left"]
[/align][align="left"]4)However, as children grow up to adults, it is entirely possible that the interior factors replace the exterior ones, exerting the main effects on people's behaviors. Being independent, analytical as well as insusceptible to various temptations, all of these abilities contribute to one's perseverance in pursuing his personal goal of life. Moreover, the purpose of education is not just instilling students with knowledge, but to develop other vital abilities of students, such as thinking analytically, putting forward question and solving it independently, self-teaching, etc. Therefore, it is convincing to say that every educated person should have the capacity of sticking to his own desire of success, as well as unaffecting by exterior impacts.[/align][align="left"]
[/align][align="left"]5)In conclusion, although many rules set up by legislation do regulate and restrict the certain behaviors of humans, it is the interior factors, to a larger extent, that have great impact on every educated person, who is insusceptible to temptations, analytical to difficult problems, and perseverant to achieve one's own destination.[/align][align="left"]
[/align][align="left"]words:533[/align][align="left"]麻烦批改者给点建议，句式上或词汇上的，谢谢。[/align][align="left"]需要回批的留下地址。[/align]
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